Being tied to train tracks
Waiting for the 6pm to arrive
Volatile and insecure
There’s no reasoning
Being trapped inside an elevator
Waiting for the repairman who never comes
claustrophobic and suffocating
You can’t escape
A pain you have always had
But try to heal with a shaman
The pain is unbearable
You want cool lakes with sunshine and beautiful animals surrounding you
Innocent things to let you forget
To be free of the chains of someone else’s fears
To have to live with them is more than you can stand
escapist that’s what you are
Looking for peace of mind that doesn’t exist
March 7, 2010 at 7:15 pm
A lot of good comparisons here. I think you could do without “it’s like” though, as that is implied. Straight metaphors are usually stronger than similes IMO.
March 7, 2010 at 7:24 pm
Matt,
Thanks for the critique. I hadn’t thought about the use of “it’s like”, true it is already implied. Thanks for commenting. I really appreciate it.
Regards,
Pamela